“Great! A long hard day at work, now this at home?” swore Mala.
Stale smoke, cigarette butt filled ashtray, empty liquor bottle, bunch of discarded tissues, among others greeted Mala, as she unlocked her apartment door.
“I need to find an apartment of my own,”vowed Mala.
A trainee in a BPO, Mala earned just enough to survive in a shared apartment. Mala had steadfastly refused to earn extra by working odd hours. She preferred time for herself, angering her manager. Not anymore.
“I shall work like a machine and earn more,” she resolved.
Word Count : 94
This is an effort to write aflash fiction effort with the Friday fictioneers, 17thAug, 2018, using picture prompt provided by Yvette Prior.
The horrible cycle of modern life for many.
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True. It becomes difficult to share people who have different outlook to life. Thank you for reading.
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I think she should… or find a new roommate!
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We both agree on this one. Thank you for reading.
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That’s one of the drawbacks of shared accommodation. You never know what type of flat mate you’re going to get. Nicely done.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you very much for kind words and for reading.
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Nicely written. Good description, straightforward story that you tell clearly, and a nice bit of overlap at beginning and end of the story (Namely, how did Mala get such a slob of a flat mate? and how will she cope with the extra hours that she doesn’t really want to work?)
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Thank you for your comments. I am learning. I shall work on your suggestions. Please keep reading.
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Enough is enough, I think.
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Anything to get out of the place, I agree.
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Thank you for reading.
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A poignant story. Liked work like a machine – but she must remember to refuel herself regularly, with introspective time!
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True. First she will find a good place, then she will have ‘me time’. Thank you for reading and commenting.
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Contentment may come before money, but she’s definitely going to need more money to find contentment.
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Thank you for reading and taking time to comment.
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Some people live to work, others work just to make a living. I value my time too.
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Thank you for reading and leaving your comment.
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Tough choice, but the right choice. I couldn’t stand living like that, either.
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Dear Abhiray,
Perhaps she’d be better off finding a new roommate, thus allowing her her personal time. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you for reading.
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Fine story telling, that makes one think…I known rooms like that, sometimes the person behind the mess is the gentlest of individuals.
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Yes that is possible. Many a time we may not be aware that our actions are causing inconvenience to others. Thank you for reading.
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Living alongside another person can be difficult. Mala is right in her decision to earn her way out of the problem and into her own accommodation.
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Thank you for reading.
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Sometimes you need to be pushed out of an unhealthy situation. It looks like she is at that point. Let’s hope she doesn’t get sucked into the spiral of more work and more money too much.
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True. Unless one is at peace at the place they live in, rest of the activities tend to go off balance. I think she needs to arrive at a balanced position.
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This is really well put together. Great piece.
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Thank you for reading.
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