“What is this tall structure?”
“It is the victory tower, mother. This tower reminds us of those who have made supreme sacrifice.”
Mayor has dedicated this tower to this city. This tower represents victory of good over evil, victory of truth over lies.
Shailaja was visiting her daughter. She looked at the tower, visible from the apartment. Shailaja wondered “what victory, war still continues and people still losing lives.”
“Mother you think too much. There is a restaurant on top of the tower. Let us enjoy a good meal and a great view. Good for stomach and good for business.”
Word Count: 100
This is an effort to write aflash fiction effort with the Friday fictioneers, 17th, Oct, 2018, using picture prompt provided by host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Other stories can be found here.
Photo Promt : Jilly Funnel
Best to try and put it out of mind, but they are right, war never seems to end despite all the sacrifices.
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Thank you for reading. War rages on.
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Maybe it’s not the winning that counts. Then you have to rewrite all the history books
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In this day and age in an increasingly connected world, is there any clear cut win?
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According to the winners, yes
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Is there any clear cut win or lose?
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Victory for one is loss for another…
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True.
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Telling your story mostly by the dialogue between two characters is effective.
Normally it is the older generation who are pragmatic, while the young are morally indignant. I like the way you have reversed those stereotypes in this story. It adds an extra dimension to your piece, because it surprises the reader and makes them think.
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Thank you for such critical review. I learn a lot from your comments. You are opening a new dimension for me. Thank you.
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Excellent use of dialogue. Some good questions here, universal in the asking and lack of answers.
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Thank you for kind words.
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Perhaps what we need is a nice game of checkers. But some will even fight about that. Good questions raised here.
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Thank you.
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VIctory is a myth. There is just war and post-war. Liked your story.
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Thank you.
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Sadly there will always be war. Best to just enjoy their lunch.
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True. Beyond our control.
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Dear Abhijit,
It sounds like Shailaja has seen more life than her daughter and this has made her introspective. Nice contrast between mother and daughter. Good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle. You are always very kind.
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I have ceased to believe in victories… better just enjoying the view.
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True. Meal is more tangible and view is grand from top.
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I enjoyed this, it seems to me that no one ever really wins a war. But then I think to much.
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It is a good flipping of perspectives to have an idealist mother and a realist daughter. In the end commerce wins.
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Probably. Thank you for reading.
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The daughter has a good positive attitude, but Mother is still right.
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True. If we cannot make much of a difference, better to eat a good meal. Thank you for reading.
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True. If you cannot make any difference, eat a good meal. Thank you for reading.
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Overthinking everything is a curse. That is why I so appreciate the ‘live in the moment’ attitude of the millenials.
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Thank you for reading.
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There are two types of people – one like the mother who brood a lot and then the other like the son who are more interested in the living the life.
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True.
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yes, it’s just a matter of perspective, indeed.
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True.
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The sheer practicality of the younger person is utterly credible.
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Yes, that is true.
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I like the reversal of the stereotypes of how people of particular ages react. Shows how opinions & outlook aren’t generational like is often said. Excellent job!
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Thank you for reading.
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Conflict is part of the human experience. If only we handled it better. Perhaps more lunches in order?
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There are no winners when there’s a war. It’s sad that the tower represents something the mother
isn’t happy about but perhaps the restaurant will have good food and she’ll put aside her thoughts.
Nicely done …
Isadora 😎
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Thank you for reading. I agree there is nothing called a winner.
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